•Content (relevance to question, length,
repetition)
•Communicative achievement (register,
essay style language, holding reader’s attention)
•Organisation (cohesive devices, linkers,
paragraphing, ordering of ideas)
•Language (complexity of grammatical
structures, wide vocabulary, errors in language)
Content
•Use examples in the body of the essay.
Some of you did not use enough.
•Do not repeat ideas you have already
mentioned. Use new ones and make sure they are relevant.
•Inventing statistics is fine but
everything in proportion.
•Focus specifically on the question.
Mention “young people” in your answer.
Communicative achievement
•An essay should always be formal.
That means no contractions, “…”, “well” or “let me give”.
•Give your opinion but try to make the
essay as objective
as
possible. Use plenty of passive structures.
•Questions are good but do not include too
many. Too many questions make it sound like an article.
•Your conclusion should
paraphrase and summarise the ideas you have already mentioned.
Organisation
•The essay should have 4 paragraphs:
Introduction, Body 1, Body 2 and Conclusion.
•The essay should be balanced
and
give both points of view equal weight.
•Leave a clear line between paragraphs to
make it obvious to the examiner.
•“On the other hand” can only be used
after “on the one hand”
Language
•Use a large variety of grammatical
structures: third conditionals, passives, inversion, unreal past tenses.
•“Not only do young people believe…”
•“No sooner have people become famous than
they turn to drink and drugs”.
•“Michael Jackson is believed to have been
addicted to several drugs”
•“It’s high time that people woke up and
realised that being famous is not the be all and end all”.
•Don’t repeat vocabulary and make it
varied.
Common errors
•Belief (n) – believe (v)
•To provide s.b. with s.th
•“A 40% of people think…” WRONG – “A
shocking 40% of people think…” RIGHT
•Los propios jóvenes = young people themselves
•Materialistic
•It is related TO – it is linked TO – it
is connected TO
•8 OUT of 10
What
you know or who you know?
I
strongly believe that having the right skills and qualifications is essential
in order to get a good job and succeed in life. However, with the large numbers
of people competing for jobs nowadays, aren’t social connections equally
important?
Some
parents encourage their sons and daughters to keep up with the academic work in
order to acquire the necessary knowledge to get into college and obtain a
well-paid job one day. These young people do their best to be the first student
in the class, they quit their
social life and have very few friends. But then when they finish their studies,
despite their impressive marks, they struggle to find a job.
On
the other hand we can find a group of people who were not necessarily brilliant
at college but who have the right connections. They are the ones who get a good
place in a company because they know the right people. Having knowledge is
undoubtedly important but I think we all need a little push from others to
succeed in today´s society.
Nevertheless
I want to make it clear that I believe that getting a job only because you have
connections is not fair and people should not be given a job if they do not
have the right qualifications. The way I see it both, knowledge and
connections, are equally important.
Useful phrases from class
This
comes down to...
On
the one hand...
Without
a shadow of a doubt...
To
put into practice
Concerning
the discussion...
It is
much more valuable to...
It
opens a lot of doors for you
Nevertheless,
Likewise
On no
condition should someone be hired without...
It is
of the utmost importance - it is paramount to
It is
a well-know fact that...
Crucial
Nonetheless
To
sum up,
Moreover,
Regarding
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